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So here I am once more
In the playground of broken dreams
Drowning my sorrows
In these Marillion CDs
These liquid lyrics
Flow straight through
Leave me wishing
You were me and
I were you.

To get inside your mind,
Feel what you feel
Hoping, praying
That this isn't real
Now the jester wont shed a tear
I've read the script - now my turn's here.
The story so far
Don't look so good
Keep hoping for a miracle
Like any fool would.
Dreaming that you were still mine -
Take me back, forgive my crime.

So here I am once more
In the playground of broken dreams
Drowning my sorrows
In these Marillion CDs
Listen to you
Sing along to Kayleigh
Leave me wishing
That I could love you and
You love me.

Yet another emotional suicide
As I have a brief encounter
With that thieving magpie -
Make me realise the game is over.
Too late to say I love you, too late to restage the play
Too late to make you realise there's so much left to say
Return to our misplaced childhood
When we danced in the snow
We go together like Punch and Judy
Can you still say you love me though?
Because when I am King; as strange as it may seem
You know that I'll need you to be my Queen.

So here I am once more
In the playground of broken dreams
In the playground of broken hearts
A legacy of romance
From a twilight world
All just lost on me
We're both just freaks
And we were meant to be
And when I missed you,
Did you miss me?
You said
Our love would last forever, you see
So could we
Get it together again, maybe?

In the playground of yesterday
I was
Losing on the swings
And
Losing on the roundabouts
And now -
I have to make you realise
Just what this is about -
You see,
Without you
There is no me.

So here I am once more
In the playground of broken dreams
Drowning my sorrows
In these Marillion CDs
These liquid lyrics
Flow straight through
Leave me wishing
You were me and
Listen to you
Sing along to Kayleigh
Leave me wishing
That I could love you and
You love me.

So here I am once more
Drowning in the liquid seas
On the Picadilly Line
Then I realise...
It's too late, I ran out of time.

The game is over
©2008-2009 ~Chickadeedee
:iconchickadeedee:

Author's Comments

OK, so this was written late Wednesday night after I drunk an obscene amount of cranberry juice and then tried to watch X-men and listen to music at the same time. I was jotting down some ideas for poetry, and then Script for a Jester's Tear came on and I had a brainwave. I combined the ideas I already, and wrote this up.
Basically, its about a guy who's girlfriend left him because of a mistake that he made; and now he's just wishing he could win her back, but by the end he realises that it's too late and The game is over. It's the first time I've ever written from a male POV, so I tried not to make it overly soppy or anything like that. Also, I made the narrator sound totally obsessed with Marillion (I will explain all the references in a moment); but as soon as I began the poem straight out with a reference, the rest just basically wrote itself.
And another thing (Joe pointed out today) Marillion songs aren't all that depressing, the narrator has just twisted them to be. I'm not really a massive Marillion fan; but I do like some of their music.
Oh, and this is dedicated to the yummy ~CrazySpaceGerbil since it sounds like him. =P Joke. And he's the only thing I can think about at the moment as well. =/ Pah. I hate it.

=/
Right, on with explaining the references!

The first 2 lines are reference to Script for a Jester's tear. The actual line is So here I am once more // In the playground of the broken hearts.
This is actually pointed out on the third line of the fifth verse. I do not understand how someone can drown in CDs. It must be quite painful. I was in fact referring to the music, drowning in the music, metaphorically speaking. Thats whats meant by liquid lyrics.
Lines 5 and 6 of the second verse are a very obvious reference to Script for a Jester's Tear. And line 10 refers to the 'fool' or jester from the album artwork.
The middle of verse 3 has a reference to the song Kayleigh
Yet another emotional suicide is a line directly from Script for a Jester's tear.
Brief Encounter was an EP, released as a tour souvenir.
The Thieving Magpie is reference to the live album The Thieving Magpie; and is actually meant as the narrator's ex-girlfriend's new guy. He refers to him as a magpie because the birds are attracted to shiny/important objects and often steal them.
The game is over is a line from Script for a Jester's tear.
Too late to say I love you, too late to restage the play Is also a line from Script for a Jester's tear.
The 7th line of this verse is a reference to the album Misplaced Childhood.
The 8th line of the verse is reference to the line in Kayleigh Do you remember, dancing in stilletoes in the snow?
Punch and Judy is a reference to the song Punch and Judy, however, the song really has nothing to do with this line, and I was just wanting a related (vaguely) 'double act' for the narrator to quote.
The last two lines of the verse are a reference to the line in Lavender When I am King, dilly dilly; you will be Queen
A legacy of romance//From a twilight world is a line from the song Fugazi
Line 7 of this verse is a reference to the song Freaks
Lines 9 and 10 are a reference to to the line in Lavender When you miss me, dilly dilly, I did miss you
The last four lines of the verse are all reference to lines in Kayleigh, with added words and rearrangements.
The first 5 lines of the next verse (verse 6) are all references to lines in Script for a Jester's tear.
Lines 2 and 3 of verse 8 are from Fugazi
And the last line of the poem is from Script for a Jester's tear.

I checked all these out, to see if I'd got them right; but if anyone spots any mistakes, please point them out and I'll rectify them. <3

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:iconcrazyspacegerbil:
This is brillaint
I love it!, straight to my fav's
Well done on getting it from the male prospective, it's really effective. And to say your not a big Marillion fan, you've done very well with the refferences. Infact I can't see any mistakes at all. This is slightly embarassing as you know a lot of the lyrics better than me.

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Who want's to live forever?
:iconchickadeedee:
Hehe, thanks a lot! I'm really glad you liked it - I was beginning to question it's effectiveness, you know =/ I think I should definately stick to female POV in future though - but I'm glad you liked this. =) :heart:
:iconmoon-phantom:
Deep stuff ^^

Well laid out and nicely structured. Well done!

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